Just looking at it quickly and as a Google document (I guess) rather than downloading it -- so maybe some format things are "different" when looked at this way -- it appears the "bullets" (dots) inside the line on the right should be moved away from the line -- like split the difference between the line and the text.<div>
<br></div><div>And the top line - the motto sort of -- should be reworded. Here's the way it is now:</div><div><br></div><div><div>NCDXA – A club with heritage, proven performance, experience</div><div>& has been pro-active in leading the way for future DXers since 1972</div>
<div><br></div><div><br></div><div>To not eliminate words, to make it grammatically more correct, you need to add that word "that" after the ampersand. </div><div><br></div><div>Instead of doing that, sticking with the sense of what you have chosen to say, I might reword it something like this: "NCDXA -- a club with heritage, proven performance and experience, pro-active in leading the way for future DXers since 1972."</div>
<div><br></div><div>Although "pro-active" and "leading the way" seem redundant to me. Seems to me an improvement is leaving out "pro-active."</div><div><br></div><div>When it comes to that, I would think most prospective members would consider themselves "current DXers" rather than "future DXers." I think I would drop the word future.</div>
<div><br></div><div>Then, tweaking it to a more "headline style," you might leave out the words "a club" -- and is there a difference in nuance between an "association" (which is in the name) and a "club?" Dunno. But, this iteration might go like this: "NCDXA - heritage, proven performance, experience, leading the way for future DXers since 1972."</div>
<div><br></div><div>Beyond that, it's questioning or tweaking the actual content, the meaning of individual words. I don't quite know what is intended by "performance" in this context, for instance....</div>
<div><br></div><div>- Rich KE3Q</div><div><br></div><div><br></div><div><br></div><br><div class="gmail_quote">On Wed, Dec 28, 2011 at 5:30 PM, Bud Governale, W3LL <span dir="ltr"><<a href="mailto:w3ll@arrl.net">w3ll@arrl.net</a>></span> wrote:<br>
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<div><font face="Bookman Old Style">Hi Dave,</font></div>
<div><font face="Bookman Old Style"></font> </div>
<div><font face="Bookman Old Style">I can't find anything not to like about the
front page of the New Membership brochure!</font></div>
<div><font face="Bookman Old Style"></font> </div>
<div><font face="Bookman Old Style">Its colors are eye catching while
at the same time succinctly captures all needed information.
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<div><font face="Bookman Old Style">HNY and 73,</font></div>
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<div><font face="Bookman Old Style">Bud W3LL</font></div><div><div class="h5">
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<div style="FONT:10pt arial">----- Original Message ----- </div>
<div style="FONT:10pt arial;BACKGROUND:#e4e4e4"><b>From:</b>
<a title="k3lp@yahoo.com" href="mailto:k3lp@yahoo.com" target="_blank">David C</a> </div>
<div style="FONT:10pt arial"><b>To:</b> <a title="w3ll@arrl.net" href="mailto:w3ll@arrl.net" target="_blank">w3ll@arrl.net</a> </div>
<div style="FONT:10pt arial"><b>Cc:</b> <a title="w4fqt@arrl.net" href="mailto:w4fqt@arrl.net" target="_blank">Ben</a> ; <a title="n1kc@arrl.net" href="mailto:n1kc@arrl.net" target="_blank">Brian Bayus</a> ; <a title="k1mu@arrl.net" href="mailto:k1mu@arrl.net" target="_blank">Rick Murphy</a> ; <a title="n4zh@arrl.net" href="mailto:n4zh@arrl.net" target="_blank">Terrance Hines</a> ; <a title="ncdxa@ncdxa.org" href="mailto:ncdxa@ncdxa.org" target="_blank">ncdxa@ncdxa.org</a> ; <a title="bernie@dailydx.com" href="mailto:bernie@dailydx.com" target="_blank">ANTHONY MC CLENNY
JR.</a> </div>
<div style="FONT:10pt arial"><b>Sent:</b> Wednesday, December 28, 2011 9:33
AM</div>
<div style="FONT:10pt arial"><b>Subject:</b> New Membership Brochure - Front
Side</div>
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<div style="BACKGROUND-COLOR:#fff;FONT-FAMILY:bookman old style,new york,times,serif;COLOR:#000;FONT-SIZE:12pt">
<div>Hello Bud (W3LL), Bernie (W3UR) and NCDXA
Members:</div>
<div style="FONT-FAMILY:bookman old style,new york,times,serif;FONT-SIZE:12pt">
<div style="FONT-FAMILY:times new roman,new york,times,serif;FONT-SIZE:12pt">
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<div style="BACKGROUND-COLOR:#fff;FONT-FAMILY:bookman old style,new york,times,serif;COLOR:#000;FONT-SIZE:12pt">
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<div>Please find the attached copy of the New Membership
b<var></var>rochure for you review and comment.</div>
<div> </div>
<div>This will be used as the front page with our Membership Application on
the backside.</div>
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<div>I <var></var>hope you like it!</div>
<div> </div>
<div>David Collingham - K3LP</div>
<div>NCDXA
President</div></div></div></div><br><br></div></div></div></blockquote></div></div></div>
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